EVERY ONCE IN A WHILE, a page comes along that proves to us we’re still learning—always learning. This page from Kristin proves the point. Her note follows, with Ed’s comments below the page.
I did this page for this past Sunday [Aug. 1]. The story is about “Orangeburg’s Got Talent . . . Kids” talent showcase that is upcoming. I had to make 20 mug shots look somewhat decent in about an hour-and-a-half. I really kind of winged it on this one, just trying not to make it look like 20 mugshots on a page if you know what I mean? I liked the keyboard effect that I made and I think it made it look better but I would love to hear some feedback.
1. The undulating keyboard doesn’t do it for me, though I’m guessing you had not much else to work with—if anything. This just feels too “clip arty” for my taste.
2. The head sizes vary too widely in the mugs. I’d have taken the time to make them similar in size.
3. There’s no order to placement of the mugs, unless I’m missing something. Is this the order in which they will perform? And…how come some of them get “special” placement in the bottom right corner?
4. Placement of the Online box in the center of the story is distracting and seems like an afterthought.
5. The background screen seems gratuitous.
In all, Kristin, this is not a page I’d put in my portfolio. Sorry.
How about the rest of you? Am I being too harsh? What are your thoughts?
KRISTIN LEIGH COKER, lead designer at The Times and Democrat in Orangeburg, SC, sends along this page for your review and comment. That’s “comment” as in “let us know what you think!” As Kristin suggests in her note “…just be nice.”
“I didn’t know that you wanted us to send you samples of our work. Great idea!
“I’ve sent you our annual July 4th We Will Not Forget poster that ran this past Saturday. We Will Not Forget is a series that we put out on Memorial Day, Veterans Day, Fourth of July and September 11th to remember our soldiers who have fallen and who still fight for our freedom.
“For this poster I downloaded a copy of the Engraved Delcaration from http://www.archives.gov. I took a stock file photo of fireworks and a United States flag and configured them into one background. Then I took a stock picture of the Statue of Liberty and set her foreground. At the bottom are the mug shots of our local fallen soldiers since the beginning of the war in Iraq.
“Would love some feedback. Good, bad…just be nice.”
FROM ED: I like this page very much, Kristin. It has spirit and it demands to be read. It shows planning and excellent visual thinking. I might have done a few things differently (I’m still not sure about the script headline…a bit too soft for my taste), but overall this is an excellent page. I’d offer it in contests.
How about the rest of you? A winner? Pretty good? Could be better? Let us know your thoughts!