MARC SENDS ALONG another tab spread for us to review.
Thought I’d submit my centerfold from last week for blogger comment. Our reporter was going to write a single (and LONG) main story. I suggested breaking up the Mass from the main piece and also asked for “picture quotes” to give me some elements to use to liven up the layout. I had considered rotating the page — I’ve done that once before — but there was not enough time to come up with two versions for approval, so I went with our traditional layout.
1. A bit of negative space here and there would have made this more inviting. It feels crammed.
2. I’d have used fewer photos and given some of them more size. The interior shot with the flag at the bottom left is a candidate.
3. The red in the lead headline is a bit too pink for my taste. I’d have picked up the red in the bishop’s vestments (photo at bottom right).
4. I like the idea of the mugs with the quotes but…I don’t like the “checkerboard” placement of the three at the top of the page. I’d have done all three mugs to the right, with the quotes at left.
5. I don’t like grouped captions. The one with the four photos at bottom center is an example: it refers to the photo at the top of the spread. Sorry, but’s that’s just too much of a reach for me. I’d prefer each photo to have its own caption.
6. The smaller photo in the Mass sidebar is off grid… looks like it was placed there just to fill a hole. It’s distracting.
Comments, quips, criticisms from the rest of you? What do you think? Am I being too critical? Chime in!