SCOTT HAS SUBMITTED several pages for comment over time—and here’s another for us to review together.
FROM SCOTT: Hello Ed, hope all is well. Here’s a page I just finished today…nothing too earth-shattering, but I thought it was kind of interesting. I tried to keep it really clean, but I did have a little fun getting some of the vines to intertwine with some of the letters in the headline…tried to use restraint though.
So, here’s my submission.
FROM ED:
1. The headline type looks like it’s outlined, though this may just be a “hard shadow.” Regardless, outlined type is a very ’60s look, which is another way to say it’s very dated.
2. I do like the extra effort you took weaving the vine with the headline.
3. Placing the text within the faded box is a good idea but I’d have allowed more space between the box and the type. I recommend at least one pica of space between the type and the edge of the box.
4. I’d have placed the subhead inside the box with the text. It’s a bit tough to read where it is.
5. It’s difficult to find and read the caption.
Overall, a good attempt—but it’s unexciting.
