FREQUENT CONTRIBUTOR Michael has submitted three more pages for review and comment. Check back next week for another trio from Michael. His note follows, then pages…with comment from Ed.
Hi Ed. Here’s three more pages for the blog. I’m particularly proud of the A1 with the football banner and reversed nameplate.
The A1 with the voter turnout centerpiece was my solution for not having a lot of art to work with.
Lastly, I hope you don’t mind the “funky font” on the feature package on Halloween haunted trails. Like Kristin Coker, I made an editorial judgment to bend the rules because it’s a fun story and festive time of year (Halloween). As always, however, I fight ads when it comes to the rest of the section front.
1. The top-of-page treatment is excellent. Were I to suggest any change, it would be to try to make the nameplate just a bit larger.
2. It’s unfortunate that you had to place the postal patron box and the edition information to the right of the story, but I don’t know where else I’d have put it. Like you, I would not have wanted to trim the width of the photo. Perhaps a .5-point rule to the right of the story would have helped.
1. Nice work with the voter package. Did you consider darkening the red on the curtain? The red here is very aggressive and it’s hard to read the other material against such a bright color.
2. When you have only a very shallow space for text (voter turnout story), consider moving the byline up. Here, you could have placed it to the left of the voter’s shoes.
3. Widow at top of third leg in voter story.
4. Have you experimented with making the UPC code shallower? Most scanners would be fine with a code half this depth.
FROM ED: OK, the only worse thing than the funky font is the design of the pizza ad. Or…maybe the restaurant ad. Or…maybe the executive offices ad. Other than that, it’s OK. Did I ever mention how much I really, rrreeeaaallllllllllyyyy dislike funky fonts?
What do the rest of you think of Michael’s pages? Time to chime in!