ME FRANK TREXLER sends the July 4th front of The Daily Times for review. Ed’s comments follow.
FROM ED: A few items to note here…
1. I really like the art behind the nameplate…but isn’t it somewhat redundant to the main piece of art on the page?
2. “Four views…” really doesn’t break up the package into four separate pieces. Looks like the story is written in linear form and not segmented. I think you missed a chance to do that here.
3. No art and no pullouts in either story along the right side makes these appear to be long…and maybe a chore to read.
4. All three packages jump!
I think we missed some opportunities here. And July 4th is a front that can get better planning. Sorry…not a winner with me.
KRISTIN LEIGH COKER, lead designer at The Times and Democrat in Orangeburg, SC, sends along this page for your review and comment. That’s “comment” as in “let us know what you think!” As Kristin suggests in her note “…just be nice.”
“I didn’t know that you wanted us to send you samples of our work. Great idea!
“I’ve sent you our annual July 4th We Will Not Forget poster that ran this past Saturday. We Will Not Forget is a series that we put out on Memorial Day, Veterans Day, Fourth of July and September 11th to remember our soldiers who have fallen and who still fight for our freedom.
“For this poster I downloaded a copy of the Engraved Delcaration from http://www.archives.gov. I took a stock file photo of fireworks and a United States flag and configured them into one background. Then I took a stock picture of the Statue of Liberty and set her foreground. At the bottom are the mug shots of our local fallen soldiers since the beginning of the war in Iraq.
“Would love some feedback. Good, bad…just be nice.”
FROM ED: I like this page very much, Kristin. It has spirit and it demands to be read. It shows planning and excellent visual thinking. I might have done a few things differently (I’m still not sure about the script headline…a bit too soft for my taste), but overall this is an excellent page. I’d offer it in contests.
How about the rest of you? A winner? Pretty good? Could be better? Let us know your thoughts!