MARCUS OFFERS US two pages for review. Ed has some thoughts to share below each. Then…it’s your turn!
FROM ED: In a word…unthrilling. Other points:
1. Might’ve worked better to place the headline and subhead flush right.
2. Good lead photo, played well. I also liked the bottom right shot. Others were, well…OK.
3. Really wish you had not run the teachers story here.Is this a photo page…or not? Having that story at the bottom says “not.” Jeez. Couldn’t that story have waited another day?
1. Love the bullet holes. I think you did a good job placing them on the page.
2. Like the photos.
3. Like the machine guns package.
4. Hate the hook and the “talking fish” cutesy clippy art in the solunar table. Please fix that. Like…NOW! (Wow. That’s the first time Ed ever used red and bold on one word in this blog! He must really not like clip art!)
Other comments? Waiting to hear from the assembled multitude. You, too, can chastise The Daily Times for that solunar table dreck.
ME FRANK TREXLER sends the July 4th front of The Daily Times for review. Ed’s comments follow.
FROM ED: A few items to note here…
1. I really like the art behind the nameplate…but isn’t it somewhat redundant to the main piece of art on the page?
2. “Four views…” really doesn’t break up the package into four separate pieces. Looks like the story is written in linear form and not segmented. I think you missed a chance to do that here.
3. No art and no pullouts in either story along the right side makes these appear to be long…and maybe a chore to read.
4. All three packages jump!
I think we missed some opportunities here. And July 4th is a front that can get better planning. Sorry…not a winner with me.
HERE’S AN EXTRAORDINARY PAGE from Michael. His note follows, with comments from Ed below the page.
I have another A1 for this week’s paper [Ed note: June 30] that we just finished. It’s a 10-year anniversary special report on the Myrtle Beach tornado of July 6, 2001.
Here are a few thoughts: I’m required to place the postal permit in the upper right hand corner. Our paper doesn’t get delivered without it. I’m also required to have the bar code. I wanted to go six columns with the submitted tornado pic so tucked [the bar code] in the bottom left corner of the photo. It normally goes in the bottom left corner of the page under my teasers, but I eliminated my teasers to accommodate the tornado package.
It’s the best I thought I could do considering I’m our publication’s editor, lead designer, reporter and main photographer. I really do wish I could just get rid of the postal permit.
Thanks for the helpful feedback!
Overall, I love the top of the page. Great play on the photo and you really did fine with the postal box and the bar code. Only two nits I’d mention:
1. I think you downplayed the nameplate too much. Almost looks like an afterthought.
2. Not sure I’d have bothered with the Rivoli Theatre story on the front. I’d have gone purely with the tornado package, making it as large as possible.
How about the rest of you? Thoughts?