IT’S BEEN ABOUT A MONTH since Michael submitted this recent batch of pages. I appreciate his patience…and…it’s good to have enough submissions in the file that we can sit on some pages for a while.
Michael’s note follows, then his pages…with comments from Ed.
Hi Ed. You can keep Guido and Vinnie at bay. I’ve got another cluster of pages I think I can hang my hat on for the blog. I hope you enjoy.
One vital note … The two sports pages titled “CF_sportsspread6 and CF_sportsspread7” are intended to be paired together. They ran in the paper as a center spread (technically not a true double truck though). The pages are part of a region football preview during the bye week. The fortune teller idea came out of my interview questions with coaches. I asked each coach: “What does your crystal ball tell you about how your team will do this season.” The fortune teller idea flowed from there.
Comments on the other pages:
Photo page | A standard photo page of volunteers helping to build a large community playground, similar to one they have in Greer.
Circus preview | Ads limited my circus page to a 1/2 page. The MB Herald Visitors’ Edition version was a full page.
TERI investigation | A common criticism of state retirement plans is that some say it’s double dipping. I got the idea of a huge hand dipping into a wad of money. The basket stuffed with cash is clip art from adbuilder.
Tuscany fire | A very newsy week with lots of art. We had a better fire photo that was horizontal, but the vertical design seemed to work better with everything else.
1. I’m not at all turned on by the reverse on the first page. Reverses are hard to read.
2. It might have helped with the illusion had you made the helmets a bit blurry and perhaps tilted them a bit. They’re just too sharp and too nicely arranged.
3. Second page is fine: crisp and easy to follow.
I’m good with this page—except for the top photo being washed out.
I think you overdid it here. I like the circus type face but the middle part of the headline—”the greatest show in”—is just too much. Perhaps you were trying too hard.
I like the page, especially the use of the infographic. The illustration helps bring interest to the lead package.
Good lead photo but I’m bothered by the side-by-side multi-column headlines that fight each other for attention. Perhaps it might have worked better to place the fire headline below the photo…or…move the Freestyle sign photo to the top.
That’s all from Ed. How about the rest of you? Jump in with your comments!